#233 - 04-15 Blighted Contemplations - in Chapter IV

04-15 Blighted Contemplations

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TrueGhul

TrueGhul TrueGhul said:

Hi guy
this page requires some context so about a song in the background,that polish alternative rock from 1996yr,for both song and transleted lyrics see links down below.

youtube.com - Song (polish)
lyricstranslate.com - lyrics in english

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Dix

Dix Dix

Hi - found your comic today and just finished binging the archives.

I have to be honest that it is a little rough around the edges, and could benefit from proofreading -some grammatical errors it seems as though English is not your first tongue. This is not a negative comment in any light, as learning another language is never easy and English can be famously tricky to new students.

Non-theless, I have just finished it one sitting, and this is partly why:
-The world-building
The concepts at a high level are familiar. Fantastic racism, arrogant but honorable (in their eyes) aristocractic empire vs. corrupt but egalitarian democracy betrayed by small clique. The details and way you handle it, though? That makes it feel interesting and fresh, with a lot of potential for stories to grow organically.
-The characters
Any story can live or die by its cast, and yours has potential. Many appear to already be more fleshed out than you sometimes see in stories like this, although the ruling council are almost a pastiche of corrupt elites.
-The art
Improving and has a good style that makes your comic distinct.

I cannot claim to be in in any of the fields touched upon above superior to your talents - this is simpylk some honest feedback. I look forward to seeing how the story grows!

(& thanks for the introduction to Mr. Zoob! :)

17th Mar 2021, 5:01 PM

TrueGhul

TrueGhul TrueGhul

hi,
I really appreciate feedback, I always encourage my readers to tell me what they like and what dislike. Otherwise improving feel like wandering in the mist. Anyway, I would like to ask you If you can tell me some more about grammatic errors most of the pages was proofread. So, if It isn't a problem please send me more details on trueghul@gmail.com

17th Mar 2021, 7:37 PM

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